Putting Pen To Paper

Monday, July 17, 2006

Your Cup of Life

posted by Ruth at 7/17/2006 04:15:00 AM

Drink deeply from your cup of life.
Savor each precious drop.
Sip lightly to taste each flavor.
Lick the foam from off the top.
Control the list of ingredients.
Make sure they're the very best,
For what you put into your cup
Should never be taken in jest.
Add a lot of joy and laughter,
A touch of heartache for spice,
A trace amount of pain,
Just enough to make you think twice.
If you make it three quarters love
It would then be just about right.
Add integrity and honesty
To help you sleep better each night.
With diligence to each detail,
What a brew your life will be...
Intoxicating and valued
And your very own recipe!
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7 Comments:

  • Again, this is one of my old ones, but one of my favorites.

    By Blogger Ruth, at 7/17/2006 04:24:00 AM  

  • Very nice, Ruth. I'd like to suggest a couple of changes...

    In line 4, starting it with the word "And" makes the cadence a little smoother.

    Also, try indenting every other line to make it more apparent to the reader that it is a continuation of the line before. I think this will improve its readability and it's display on the page.

    By Blogger WDavid, at 7/17/2006 05:42:00 AM  

  • Ruth, I love how it flows and of course the message is splendid. Martha needs this sent to her ASAP! (grin)

    Aaron

    By Blogger Aaron, at 7/17/2006 08:37:00 AM  

  • Okay, here we're going to have to differ. I like the way line 4 reads and, not all the lines continue to just the one below it. Sometimes it continues to three or four. I can't indent all of those lines to continue the thought. Then the rest of the poem wouldn't look right. Got any other ideas?

    By Blogger Ruth, at 7/17/2006 08:39:00 AM  

  • It seems that I did not read it carefully enough to see that it wasn't always a two line concept. My apologies. No, no other ideas spring to mind.

    By Blogger WDavid, at 7/17/2006 09:00:00 AM  

  • This poem could be sent to every politician!

    Instead of indents... maybe paragraph breaks after each pair of rhymes?

    Something about details and recipe doesn't ring for me... also -- this is your beautiful recipe... not mine... or maybe I find this too challenging -- what -- you mean take responsibility!?!?!

    How about just "Make it your own recipe."

    By Blogger Peter, at 7/18/2006 11:01:00 AM  

  • Peter, I think it is assumed that the reader will make it his/her own recipe, with appropriate changes to fit their own tastes. Like you said, this is my recipe and only a starting point for your own creativity. I love changing recipes to fit my taste of the day. Don't you?

    By Blogger Ruth, at 7/18/2006 03:30:00 PM  

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